You have some interesting things happening here. I'm partial to videos that are fairly abrasive, and there are some intense flickering sections in this video that I like quite a bit, particularly the one with the shifting color fields. The video noise creates some nice textures, particularly with the video compression artifacts. I don't quite understand the images at the beginning and the end of the piece. I don't know what the dinosaur cookies or toilet flushing get you. If you think of each decision you make in a piece like this as a transaction, it's good to ask yourself what each decision buys you. The decision to use the flicker gives the piece some aggression. The decision to transition to the markers takes the piece from the abstract to the representational (not necessarily a smooth or productive transition, but could be tweaked to build some meaning).
There are a few other decisions that I don't understand. The music, while elegant, doesn't seem to add much to the piece. Perhaps if the image were cut in such a way as to produce some relationship with the audio track, transitions matching the audio, similar rhythms emerging from image and audio, etc. But right now that's not happening. I also don't understand the mix of the vertically oriented footage with the horizontally oriented footage. You can rotate the prior to make it match the rest of the footage. Right now it's pretty distracting. I think this piece needs some further editing to make it feel a little more unified. You've got some interesting material, I just don't think your editing is building interesting or useful relationships between the various sources yet.
You have some interesting things happening here. I'm partial to videos that are fairly abrasive, and there are some intense flickering sections in this video that I like quite a bit, particularly the one with the shifting color fields. The video noise creates some nice textures, particularly with the video compression artifacts. I don't quite understand the images at the beginning and the end of the piece. I don't know what the dinosaur cookies or toilet flushing get you. If you think of each decision you make in a piece like this as a transaction, it's good to ask yourself what each decision buys you. The decision to use the flicker gives the piece some aggression. The decision to transition to the markers takes the piece from the abstract to the representational (not necessarily a smooth or productive transition, but could be tweaked to build some meaning).
ReplyDeleteThere are a few other decisions that I don't understand. The music, while elegant, doesn't seem to add much to the piece. Perhaps if the image were cut in such a way as to produce some relationship with the audio track, transitions matching the audio, similar rhythms emerging from image and audio, etc. But right now that's not happening. I also don't understand the mix of the vertically oriented footage with the horizontally oriented footage. You can rotate the prior to make it match the rest of the footage. Right now it's pretty distracting. I think this piece needs some further editing to make it feel a little more unified. You've got some interesting material, I just don't think your editing is building interesting or useful relationships between the various sources yet.