While you're video is a little on the short side, there are some good things happening here. I like that you include the found sound from the moving car, particularly the dialogue about the city "on fire". The image is nice as well, though I don't know if the vertical orientation really serves you. It's nice that the music track seems to be part of the location audio as well, otherwise it would start to seem more like a music video, whereas now it is partially in a documentary mode mixed with something more experimental.
That said, I think the piece is a little too short and too simple as it is now. The visuals are nice and the audio is starting to do something interesting, but it needs something else to push it further, something to interact with this idea of the city being on fire. I think the sunset over the Dallas skyline is a perfectly good thing to meditate upon in a video or other artwork. The sky in this region of the south/south-west can be and has been very meaningful to different groups over time (taking a look at Native American literature like the writings of N. Scott Momaday might be a place to find some inspiration toward this end. "The way to rainy mountain" is particularly good and a short read). Not to pick on the vertical orientation too much, but seeing the hard edge takes attention away from the content and refocuses it on the act of shooting (with an iPhone I assume) and this isn't necessarily a productive association. So I would recommend reshooting that if you were going to continue with this piece. The filters you use are also very recognizable some of the time. I would minimize their use unless it's absolutely necessary or you are able to produce a more complex, less recognizable effect.
yo, your video is set to Private
ReplyDeleteya my bad on that one, i set it to public now
Deleteya my bad on that one, i set it to public now
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ReplyDeleteWhile you're video is a little on the short side, there are some good things happening here. I like that you include the found sound from the moving car, particularly the dialogue about the city "on fire". The image is nice as well, though I don't know if the vertical orientation really serves you. It's nice that the music track seems to be part of the location audio as well, otherwise it would start to seem more like a music video, whereas now it is partially in a documentary mode mixed with something more experimental.
That said, I think the piece is a little too short and too simple as it is now. The visuals are nice and the audio is starting to do something interesting, but it needs something else to push it further, something to interact with this idea of the city being on fire. I think the sunset over the Dallas skyline is a perfectly good thing to meditate upon in a video or other artwork. The sky in this region of the south/south-west can be and has been very meaningful to different groups over time (taking a look at Native American literature like the writings of N. Scott Momaday might be a place to find some inspiration toward this end. "The way to rainy mountain" is particularly good and a short read). Not to pick on the vertical orientation too much, but seeing the hard edge takes attention away from the content and refocuses it on the act of shooting (with an iPhone I assume) and this isn't necessarily a productive association. So I would recommend reshooting that if you were going to continue with this piece. The filters you use are also very recognizable some of the time. I would minimize their use unless it's absolutely necessary or you are able to produce a more complex, less recognizable effect.